81.5K Some good things have developed. Couple of good ideas that seem to have worked. I've had to rewrite the back part of the married scene because that turned out to be all wrong. When I read through it, it was really rough and inconsistent both internally and with everything leading up to the chapter. I have some concerns about the middle parts that feel boring, but I may have fixed that today. GML and King actually conspire a bit because King will do anything to protect the girls, even at the cost of PE. It seemed like a great thing when I wrote it. In subsequent scenes that little bit really added to the tension. Oh, King is leaving them alone, well, is GML going to make his move? Of course, it's quite possible it will not seem so great later, but we'll see.
posted by Carolyn @ 6/19/2004 11:15:00 PM Permalink
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